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    dots Submission Name: Inexorable Wantdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsInexorable Wantdots
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    Inexorable Want



    How do I find
    These sentences
    Written as they are
    In ephemeral ink
    Indelible lines
    Inscribed in my being

    Spectral yearnings

    It crashes me
    To rocks
    In unanswerable waves
    Swimming tidal
    To the inexorable
    Yet
    The implacable distance
    Confounds me

    Longing vent me no more
    In twists and turns
    And unmade beds
    Where crumpled kisses
    Dream on hot soaked cushions
    Leave me not
    To the ever restless
    Fumblings
    Quiet unheard of whisperings
    Of her name

    How do I find
    The collective alphabetic
    Of love unknown
    Yet
    Divulged by these
    The screeching banshees
    Of petal falling
    Corpuscle red
    They flow through my blood
    Unbidden
    Unwarranted
    Unwanted
    And so desperate

    How do they find me
    On such a precarious brink
    With the voltage
    And permission of electricity
    Rapine in all my singularity
    Hurricane she batters at me
    For all my will to resist
    I am
    Weak

    I cannot

    Help me please
    Lest I drown dark
    Brooding in foreverís need
    She is my quiet
    And ever sun set calmed
    Sea
    And I
    I am a tempest
    Left to bellow and blow
    Inside an hour glass
    In the confines of my soul

    Help me please
    Save me from this void ripping
    As she shreds every day
    Every hour
    With my unrequited returning
    To her arms

    Save me

    For I have found
    My life
    My soul companion
    So far from me
    On some so strange a horizon
    That the distance
    Between us
    Could prove to be
    My
    Undoing







    Submitted on 2009-02-10 20:12:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem. Except the end. You can do better than that.
    | Posted on 2009-02-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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