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    dots Submission Name: York Beach, Mainedots

    Author: borderlinetears
    ASL Info:    27/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.92 - 1803/1574/138
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsYork Beach, Mainedots

    The oceanís sweet mist rose in the
    hot July air. That morning we woke
    in New York City, where taxi cabs
    were still honking through traffic.
    The waves crashing against the rocks
    provided a different silence. We sat
    in beach chairs meant for hotel guests.
    I breathed Maine air. Your air. We
    were one more mile closer. But on that
    beach in Maine, sitting in chairs not
    meant for us, it already felt like home.

    Submitted on 2009-02-10 20:31:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i had this feeling...born in Bronx, NY...

    and as a kid being whisked away to Vermont for the summers...

    i felt i wanted to move there..i was not a city boy...i liked grass, pasture, hearing the birds, the frogs, the farm sounds...
    and in moments now...i go back there in my mind...the peacefulness of it, the black eyed susans...

    i seldom go back to the Bronx, in my mind..and not at all, otherwise..

    this poem speaks to me...the conflict of being from two places at once, of feeling two places at once...
    nice write.
    | Posted on 2011-02-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      shoot i've been there?!! lol

    I just liked how you were one place and then BAM you were in another place and that first place seemed so long ago and the beach seemed like home. It's kinda like my whole move from texas back home. and there is really nothing like Maine air on the coast...thats for sure. have a good one!!

    | Posted on 2009-02-27 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      niec little write here. i like the the last part especially, taking possesion of the chairs. i also like the contrast btw ny and maine. my only nits would be find other words for 'sweet (line 1) and 'hot' (line 2).

    nice work here!

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    | Posted on 2009-02-24 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery in this is lovely, it's a unique love poem. Don't change anything.
    | Posted on 2009-02-19 00:00:00 | by longlosthoper | [ Reply to This ]
      why has this not got any comments? i wonder sometimes at this site, passing over gems like this...
    i really do.

    i love everything about this: the imagery, the associations, the love you feel for this person: all qualities which i admire and try to express in my own way, too.

    "The waves crashing against the rocks
    provided a different silence."

    simply stunning, yet simple. and easily digested.

    concise yet sweeping.
    personal yet universal.
    don't change a thing.
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]

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