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    dots Submission Name: Theatricsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 768



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    It's all been sacred
    on the other side
    glass shatters
    from a window
    to a door

    the ripples whisper to the winds
    and they take their whiskey with them on their way through my hair and his face and the sky and all the fantastic comfortable furniture salesmen

    I laugh
    this is all a joke
    a sad unspoken, screamed aloud comedy for
    the picture of self

    there is a hole in the atmosphere
    filled with scum, humiliation and lust

    When it rains we're fertilized with the father of our sins
    and we grow with his stems inside our stems

    Walk around like clowns
    such fools
    on a sad stage with guilty players




    Submitted on 2009-02-11 03:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. I have to say, I'm not sure what it's about but if I had to guess the message would be - "We're all sinners". But that's just my interpretation.
    | Posted on 2009-02-12 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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