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    dots Submission Name: Barterdots
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    Author: stefhy
    ASL Info:    21/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 165/83/37
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 700
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 446



    Description:
       I wanted something slightly different. But maybe this will save my idea that I couldn't quite get out?


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBarterdots
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    Love is unconditional
    Or so they say.
    So much rides on the little things.
    If I sold my soul to the devil,
    Never seaking more than what I already have.
    Giving my heart a break.

    Torturing nothing with the L word
    Owing no feeling to another smile
    Uncovering my immortal potential
    Could I stop myself from falling for,
    He who holds my soul?







    Submitted on 2009-02-11 06:29:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If we sold our soul to the Devil, could we avoid the torments of love? Good question; methinks the Devil, mean guy that he is, would provide even worse torments!

    Very complex and interesting piece of work!
    | Posted on 2009-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is the tryst
    with an elegant twist
    me, myself and you

    If I couldn't use persona
    as a human shield
    whatever would I do?
    | Posted on 2009-02-13 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      "Love is unconditional
    Or so they say."

    oh how i love these words as an intro!!!

    "Torturing nothing with the L word"

    try :
    "Torturing nobody with the L word"

    but even then....Fave!!!
    | Posted on 2009-02-11 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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