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My Only One


Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184 /213 /288
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on Feb. 11, 2009.
This actually was a rough draft and didn't turn out the way I really wanted. Almost threw it away, but decided to keep it. You've Swept Me Away is more on the same thought and turned out better.


My Only One



I close my eyes
and get carried away to you
to meditate
on me being alone with you.

My mind can't imagine
the real way you look
but a gentle smile
and that's all it took

For me to fall in love
with the Creator of all
The one and only Son
The truest Father of them all.

That's what you are to me
The only one I've ever had
The only way I'd want it to be
You've earned the title "Dad"

And as we dance
and laugh together
I find I never want to leave
My spirit is complete

One day we'll be together
as happy as can be
You'll hold me in Your arms
and there will be Peace forever.




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