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You've Swept Me Away

Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184 /213 /288
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on Feb. 11, 2009.
I invite you to spend time with my Father in Heaven. I dare you. Just praise and'll never want to leave His presence. And one day, we believers, won't have to!

You've Swept Me Away

I close my eyes
and get carried away
To the Throne of Grace
I fall and praise

My only true Father
The only true Dad
I've loved you forever
well, as long as I've lived

You've swept me away
on the wings of your love
we're alone here today
as we continue to rise above..

My life and the world
all it's mess
and all it's burden
I just want to stay..

With you here forever
My spirit is healed
My mind is at peace
What more could I say?

You've swept me away!

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  Indeed, as he sweeps all of our sins away! Beautiful, heartfelt write, lovely lady!
| Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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