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    dots Submission Name: False Hopedots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsFalse Hopedots
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    so it's been nearly half a year
    and still your flawless face i see as i wake.
    nearly half a year,
    and i remember your breath-taking scent;
    which by the way,
    continues to make my heart stop
    even if it's on someone else,
    'cause it's never you these days.
    and as i was saying..
    nearly half a year
    and i can still feel those arms
    so secure, so promising (so much for that)
    wrapped comfortably around me.
    bringing false hope to a fragile heart.
    nearly half a year
    and you don't know it
    but your last words:
    "this love just wasn't meant to be"
    make me want to try that much harder.
    too bad your heart disagrees..
    nearly half a fucking year
    and you hinder my thoughts
    as you always did,
    only now it's like fingernails kissing a chalk board.
    nearly half a year
    and attempts to escape your constricting "love",
    or so they call it,
    fail awefully; much to my dismay.
    nearly half a year
    still the same me,
    trying to find my way out of this hell.
    and you...you'll never change.




    Submitted on 2009-02-12 04:13:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i know it suxx. its all the same though. it always is. half a year... a whole year, two years.... im just waiting for life. keep posting


    tina
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh poems, I like this alot but I think some parts could use some work, such as 'only now its like fingernails...ect' like shortened up abit.

    and how (so much for that) is put there, i am sure you could extend the poem to fit it better.
    | Posted on 2009-02-12 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]


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