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    dots Submission Name: reflection of perfectiondots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
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    What if the energy in a breath could postpone death indefinitely?
    Beneath these skeletons are
    keys to unlock the secrets of the ethers.
    Each neuro pulse like light bulbs;
    illuminating possibilities.
    We manipulate energy,
    redirect ideas,
    imprint our own consciousness to shape our world.
    Inspiration can be as easy as inhalation
    or a space station a way.
    We pray because we can't fathom own potential,
    feeding the energy that some call god.
    Whether we created God or god created us is irrelevant;
    We are of the same intelligence,
    instead of wishing to get nearer
    Just look into a mirror.
    Let your eyes detect what our soul already knows
    reflections of perfection exposed




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      Yes, reflection of perfection indeed.

    Again, an incredibly lyrical expression of facts. Done in such a way, it's a ride, a trip, a complete adventure to experience.

    I was fascinated by religion as a kid, studied it a bit as a young adult but always found flaws of contradicting attributes in every one. I started living in the spiritual now and realized that is what we are...religion itself. In each and every one of us lies the answers of god(s). In every living thing on earth there it is.


    That's my two cents...

    XO
    Humanism
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree if this God does not yet exist, if it could be said to of become out of cosmic continuum. This has been so since before there was physical existence. Further being has an identity armed enigma that is easy to entity relate, is this soul? What is metaphysical mystique armed mystic symbiosis and is this the essence of spiritualism or is it a personal conjecture we share with social communalism. I have real empathy for the concept of ephemeral perfection, I of we embody. I agree the paradox of the mirror exposes the truth of this sooth but is it the sooth of truth? I, in we are the finite corporeally preternatural existence we exude to a degree……..oh to accessional ascensional be able to assimilate the ethereally sublime…………..nope, I'm afraid it's a corporeally preternatural animal but I empathize.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-04-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Reflections reflections echos all. Yet we seem so very small. Nice work in thought if lacking a bit in humility. What the soul knows... what indeed.

    Lloyd

    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely. I like.
    | Posted on 2011-01-22 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Dave,

    I see this one as coming through without a glitch. It just speaks of truth and says it without mincing a word.

    I think we make choices too. And every moment we waste is a travesty. I'm glad to read this and be reminded of how much we control every aspect of our lives.

    Hope all is well and that you're having fun. Thanks for sharing this too.

    peace,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2009-04-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      the questioning starts off great. then you go deep to opening words as you construct each phrase. very understanding poem.
    | Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed your first 8 lines: it's energetic, spiritual, yet totally direct in intention and execution. and i appreciate that.

    after that, in all honesty, i feel that you started preaching. it's not a bad thing, but something i'm not really a fan of. i will definitely say that ditching line 9 would help this piece tremendously: "life is what we make it" is an overused expression, y'get me?

    if this were my piece, and i know that it's not, i would keep the first 8 lines and be done with it. i like what you say about possibilities and neuronets and light and energy... there is much to ponder upon here already.

    overall, this piece reminds me of tool lyrics. and they're awesome. so there you go. my 2.9 cents.
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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