reflection of perfection -------------------------------------------
What if the energy in a breath could postpone death indefinitely?
Beneath these skeletons are
keys to unlock the secrets of the ethers.
Each neuro pulse like light bulbs;
We manipulate energy,
imprint our own consciousness to shape our world.
Inspiration can be as easy as inhalation
or a space station a way.
We pray because we can't fathom own potential,
feeding the energy that some call god.
Whether we created God or god created us is irrelevant;
We are of the same intelligence,
instead of wishing to get nearer
Just look into a mirror.
Let your eyes detect what our soul already knows
reflections of perfection exposed
Again, an incredibly lyrical expression of facts. Done in such a way, it's a ride, a trip, a complete adventure to experience.
I was fascinated by religion as a kid, studied it a bit as a young adult but always found flaws of contradicting attributes in every one. I started living in the spiritual now and realized that is what we are...religion itself. In each and every one of us lies the answers of god(s). In every living thing on earth there it is.
I agree if this God does not yet exist, if it could be said to of become out of cosmic continuum. This has been so since before there was physical existence. Further being has an identity armed enigma that is easy to entity relate, is this soul? What is metaphysical mystique armed mystic symbiosis and is this the essence of spiritualism or is it a personal conjecture we share with social communalism. I have real empathy for the concept of ephemeral perfection, I of we embody. I agree the paradox of the mirror exposes the truth of this sooth but is it the sooth of truth? I, in we are the finite corporeally preternatural existence we exude to a degree……..oh to accessional ascensional be able to assimilate the ethereally sublime…………..nope, I'm afraid it's a corporeally preternatural animal but I empathize.
i really enjoyed your first 8 lines: it's energetic, spiritual, yet totally direct in intention and execution. and i appreciate that.
after that, in all honesty, i feel that you started preaching. it's not a bad thing, but something i'm not really a fan of. i will definitely say that ditching line 9 would help this piece tremendously: "life is what we make it" is an overused expression, y'get me?
if this were my piece, and i know that it's not, i would keep the first 8 lines and be done with it. i like what you say about possibilities and neuronets and light and energy... there is much to ponder upon here already.
overall, this piece reminds me of tool lyrics. and they're awesome. so there you go. my 2.9 cents.