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    dots Submission Name: 6:3, 1:7 I Am suredots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       possitive i'm negatively charged an electron
    ready to enter the warm center of an atom
    As electrons and protons come together
    Covalently in ecstacy


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    dots6:3, 1:7 I Am suredots
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    I'll blasphemize
    yes I've heard a rumor
    That God like us has a sense of humor
    Would we still be consumers if we controlled the universe?
    like bread with butter spread
    everything seems marginalized
    So is it a suprise that some rebel as others yells i can't believe it's not butter
    clear the clutter
    undetered by space you'll find a place
    to create your own heaven
    Divinity in every breath
    six three
    one seven
    amidst murmurings of merkaba you'll find
    like so many virgins you were first touched by the divine
    God lives within our skin of this
    I AM sure
    We need only observe oursevles to see that miracles occur




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      "Would we still be consumers if we controlled the universe?"
    A thought on this:
    This question's gold; not because it's a difficult question, but because the answer makes us realize just how small-minded and ill-willed the nature is of mankind.
    The mere idea that humanity could be in control is exaggeratedly ambitious in itself. We can hardly control ourselves, let alone anything not the planet we inhabit.

    I enjoyed reading this- whether too short to satisfy or too humanistic to please.
    | Posted on 2015-02-19 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      i struglle with the thought of miracles. i guess it's the idea that some sort of scientific scale on things changes them. this makes me feel like a miracle is no less a miracle because it's scientific. i'm not sure if this was your point in the slightest. but that was the affect. a nice one it was. thanks.
    | Posted on 2014-06-07 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      "I am sure" goes a bit beyond simply having faith. I appreciate this, oh Shaman and hope to be reading more of your work.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the rythm in this, the soul.

    :) amen
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      *we are the ones we've been waiting for
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by weepingwillow | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely write and something that we can never stop saying, Dave. I recently went to a highly alternative church and realized that most of the people there were still waiting for someone to open the door to the Divine. They were willing to give their power over to those teaching that day.

    And then poets, in a glimpse of their own self portraits, can light the spark that awakens them. And I think it's in the aha moment,
    sneaking it past them instead of saying it outright.

    Hope all is well Dave, you take care.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, i agree... miracles do occur, and every day at that, if we were to just open our eyes and truly look: the act of breathing and waking for another day, the act of communicating outside of monkey-like grunts with complete vocal control, the act of so many things we take for granted, thinking it was always like this, when it wasn't.

    i often say thank you to nameless deities just because i am alive and well... that i still have ten fingers and toes and that i can still dream and work towards these unrealised dreams...

    sorry to ramble.
    well, not really.
    you know how it is.

    p.s. if we controlled the universe it would've disappeared as soon as we found out that we had control. that's what i think. we have enough trouble controlling ourselves let alone this cosmos.
    haha.
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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