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    dots Submission Name: Count Your Blessingsdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCount Your Blessingsdots
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    Count Your Blessings



    Count them
    One by one them

    I hear this desolation
    As I look around me
    Woe so lonely
    All this population
    Left to wondering
    What their lives mean
    Any meaning
    Just existing

    Still we are told
    To count our blessings
    One by one them
    Count your blessings

    At least you have eyes to see with
    Limbs to do with
    A heart to feel with
    A life to live with

    Everything to give

    But still we feel so empty
    Something missing
    Any meaning
    Just existing

    Fear our only answer to life
    And greed our only answer
    To fear

    And we all could be so happy
    So very, very happy
    If we could just turn our hands to helping
    The pleasure of giving
    Turn our world to caring
    This paradise we live in

    Are we just warring tribes
    With different colours opposing
    Religious and short sighted
    Bitch opinions

    We could all be so very happy
    Save our children
    Our happy children

    But instead we sit and count our blessings
    One by one them
    Count your blessings

    A mouthful of food
    A sip of water
    A headache pill
    An amputated arm
    A PhD degree
    An education
    200 pounds of overweight
    Malnutrition
    Slum shanty cardboard box
    Second vacation holiday home
    Feeding our stomachs
    Feeding our ego’s

    Romanticising our desperate state
    Of denial
    We are drowning
    In our own
    Refuse pile

    We could all be so very happy
    How we want to be
    So very happy
    This world is so wealthy
    Save our people
    Save our future
    Save our planet
    Save our children

    If we could just begin with caring
    Start with sharing
    The joy of helping
    The pleasure of giving
    Proud reward of being

    We would know then
    How to count our blessings
    One by one them
    Count your blessings

    Seven billion

    Seven billion















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      Just came back and read it again. Just once wouldn't look right.
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by chilliboy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Great comment on modern society and human nature I guess and extremely well put. I especially liked "Fear our only answer to life, And greed our only answer, To fear". Curious as to why you wrote Seven billion twice though. I get that it's the population but why twice?
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by chilliboy | [ Reply to This ]


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