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Happy to Be Caught


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Happy to Be Caught



To live without you, i could only bear alone.
I cannot handle something inbetween.
i try to shake away this shudder,
Almost a memory, this nightmare, bad dream.
In a wicked world,
With even worse thought,
I think of all the color and beauty
Into my life, you have brought.
The only difference between myself and a fly in a web-
I love this spider and i am so happy to be caught.




Submitted on 2009-02-12 19:58:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Breathaking. The last two lines were exquisite.
| Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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