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Near Sighted

Author: bkj43
ASL Info:    22/m/va
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Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Hindsight and foresight

Near Sighted

You carelessly dance among daises,
Which makes me smile.
But I just watch and warn
Of winter all-the-while.

I'm warmed by the sight:
The red-gold light sliding through your swinging hair;
If I were time and asked to move--
Oh, I wouldn't dare.

But time is its own lover,
And so comes the cold;
Marching in the grey
To lay to rest the gold.

And so sinks your heart,
While I remind of times to come--
But within there is but a wish
That I had danced in the sun...

Submitted on 2009-02-13 22:18:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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