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    dots Submission Name: Near Sighteddots
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    Author: bkj43
    ASL Info:    22/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    3.92 - 119/140/79
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 600



    Description:
       Hindsight and foresight


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    dotsNear Sighteddots
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    You carelessly dance among daises,
    Which makes me smile.
    But I just watch and warn
    Of winter all-the-while.

    I'm warmed by the sight:
    The red-gold light sliding through your swinging hair;
    If I were time and asked to move--
    Oh, I wouldn't dare.

    But time is its own lover,
    And so comes the cold;
    Marching in the grey
    To lay to rest the gold.

    And so sinks your heart,
    While I remind of times to come--
    But within there is but a wish
    That I had danced in the sun...




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