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    dots Submission Name: leave the dartsdots
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    Author: rosesrouges
    ASL Info:    19/f/sg
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 32/42/42
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 101
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    Bytes: 712



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    when you want to stay
    but you have to go
    because if he knows you are going to let him have his way
    the more worst your heart might blow

    when you want to say hello
    but you cannot speak the words
    because if he knows, he will let go
    and you know you will be treated like dirt

    when you want to love
    but you cannot follow your heart
    because if you do, you'll fall from high above
    higher than the sounds of the mocking bird

    when you want to stop the feelings
    but you cannot stop your heart
    you feel sad but you gotta start healing
    even if the one that hits you is that sharpened dart.




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      I like the first two lines of every stanza but every line which follows makes the flow somewhat felt forced. It nice though.

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    You seem not to be ova that guy as yet but I like the write trying to get him out ur system

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    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]


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