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    dots Submission Name: Will you be my Valentine?dots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 993
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    Description:
       This is for the girl of my dreams whoevever she may be though I may know who she is I have been proven wrong before and only God knows who she really is.


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    dotsWill you be my Valentine?dots
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    Will you be mine?
    My heart cries for you,
    Will you be mine?
    My heart rings true,
    Your eyes inspire me,
    They loose my binds,
    They set me free,
    Please be mine, oh sweet Valentine,
    Your heart warms mine,
    Your honesty makes me fear,
    Is this love or a lie?
    Would you care for one such as me, my dear?
    Becuase I want you,
    None else,
    They don't have your virtue,
    They all live for their self,
    Your beauty is breathtaking,
    Your voice is uplifting,
    Don't leave my heart aching,
    Because in my heart I am falling not tripping,
    I didn't stumble into these emotions,
    I drowned in them as one would the sea,
    I long for you,
    May you long the same for me,
    And my our hearts ring true,
    Please be mine, oh sweet Valentine.




    Submitted on 2009-02-14 19:45:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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