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    dots Submission Name: Choicedots

    Author: essence of life
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 33/38/21
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    If you found her what would you do? You know who i mean,

    the only girl that makes you feel...anything.
    The one that can put your mind at ease
    and trap your body in an eternal slumber.

    yes i mean the girl you'd die for. If you find her what would you do,

    die for her or live for yourself. Honestly i don't think i could choose.

    I'll let you know when i find her ok.

    Submitted on 2009-02-14 20:49:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    you found her!


    wow Coffee this is amazingly sweet/cute ^_^
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
    New work! Yay!
    Inner monolouge, Arguing with yourself.
    Well, when you do find her, hopefully she will never ask you to die in her stead.

    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohh yay another good piece and i read it n Valentines Day there's a shocker...well i personally if i found the right one would sacrifice myself for the sake of her...i'd make sure i'd do anything i could to make sure she would be the one i would and could spend the rest of my life with...i'd tell her how i felt about her and hope for the best thats all anyone can ever really do if they aren't sure a girl likes them ^_^ thats wat i would do...good write
    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by Twin_Snakes | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. This an interesting piece. A struggle that nearly everyone finds themself pondering at one point or another.

    Eternal slumber, ay? Like sleeping beauty. Ha. I think it'd be better if she/he could help you live you're reality in a way better than slumber. Show you that reality is more than just ABC. Sleeping is nice...but, it takes a special person to help you live your life with eyes wide open. :)

    Personally, I don't get the whole: I die for her thing. Obviously, if she's good enough to like you back, she'd want you to live for her. Or at least with her. You know what I'm saying? I mean it's great if you would put your life before her's and all, but, any girl worth giving your life to, would rather you live it with her. In my opinion, that is. **or guy...** Heh.

    | Posted on 2009-02-14 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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