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    dots Submission Name: trippin into lovedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 405
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       i didnt fall in love, i tripped....... lsd


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    dotstrippin into lovedots
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    i didnt fall in love with you
    cuz i knew it would leave me blue
    and so i tripp on your shoes
    like all the other hippies do
    and im hallucinating that this love is real
    when this love is all i feel
    and im crying in my heart
    cuz im only falling apart
    and while im frying
    i know the rest of the world is dying
    and im crying
    on the floor
    cuz i cant take this anymore
    and im walking out this door
    to take a tour
    around your world
    as it becomes so much more furled
    and twirled
    in their lies
    and when i can completely see through your disguise
    ill learn to fight
    and i wont lose you tonight
    unless you lose your light




    Submitted on 2009-02-14 22:28:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow extermly entertaining keeps the readers attention and guessing what would be next if there was more to this!

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    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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