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    dots Submission Name: spiderweb of broken dreamsdots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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    dotsspiderweb of broken dreamsdots

    he loves me
    he loves me not
    he loves me
    and im caught
    in this spiderweb of broken dreams and fallen stars
    and sprinkle coated candy bars
    and that feeling is so far
    but close enough to be seen on mars
    and while i see past all your scars
    the point is to see through mine
    and know one day ill be fine
    and i could go ahead and grind
    until all of this is right
    and you can see me as me
    and not who i will be
    or who you want me to be
    and when were finally free
    from this misery
    hopefully youll still be beside me

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