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    dots Submission Name: Sleepless Valentinedots

    Author: col13x
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    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsSleepless Valentinedots

    Sleepless Valentine

    I took the pinkie blue cuddlesome bear
    And by its blood scarlet bow
    Noose tied hung it
    Too soft
    With its felted heart
    And false cute sentiment

    And with eyes burning hot
    I tore it down
    Fluffy bear
    Thrown to the ground
    The petal shard-ed reds of rose
    Lay dashed
    On broken stems

    Thrashed to the corner
    The puffy pleading little arms
    And big round mollusc eyes
    And cutie pie smile
    So in bare feet
    I could trample flowers
    In a Disney valentine

    Till I lay on my bed
    Groaning, shudders and weeping
    And all the words I wrote
    Of love
    Couldn’t stop the pleading
    Of my heart
    Not to feel these empty arms

    Riled against my pillow I did
    And scratched and tore
    At cold cotton sheets
    While images of you
    Lay my souls ever itch in my head
    While my blood screamed
    With dead Rosetta Rosaceae

    And this nights sleepless toss and turn
    Has not begun
    Has not lifted an eye lid
    And stolen my dreams
    The long dawn has not even begun
    To bleed its way through solitary hours
    And find me capitulated
    In the teddy bear whispers
    Of the night still ahead

    I must steal myself instead
    And continue to hanker after the witches red
    Of ringlet hair
    And bend my will
    To sullen acceptance
    Not together
    Not yet

    Submitted on 2009-02-15 10:29:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      while reading this write-up it was like each stanza just got better...and higher my eyebrows went! lol...really good write-up...the emotions were clearly drawn up for the least intellectual reader like me to even figure it out!

    | Posted on 2009-02-18 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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