Description: NOT FINISHED!!
I knwo My Punctuation is Messed Up you Dont Need To Remind Me.....
I Write How It Comes To My Head.. not How You Think it Should Be..
This Poem is About My Life.. Its A Fairytale Yet A Story
Written By Myself..
Its My Story My Life Written In Words Which Sound So Graceful
Read It And Leave Your Feedback
My Fairytale -------------------------------------------
Im Kind Of Like Cinderella You See
The World Ran By In Front Of Me
But That Fateful Night My World Changed
There Were No Glass Slippers Or Fancy Balls
Just Prince Charming At My Door...
My Brand New Life Was In His Hand
I Closed My Eyes And Off I Went
Everything Was Clearer A World With More Colour
More Amazing, To Which I Would Soon Discover
A World Of Love, Trust And Faith
A Happy Ending Would Lay On The Next Page.
Locked In A Tower A Million Metres From The Ground
Prince Charming Was There To Lend A Hand
To Escape This World I Had Forever Known
With One Little Kiss I Finally Awoke
From The Dream Id Been Living Inside Of Me
Everything Id Dreamt Had Finally Come True
Everything I Needed I Found In You
But Of course There Was The Wicked Step Mother Always Trying To Bring Me Down
To Ruin This Fairytale I Had Found
But The Story Was Not Finished
The Page Has Not Turned
There Is More To This Story
For Which You Will learn
I Have Changed The Story
I have Changed The Location
Which Now Leaves Me Here In My Final Desitnation
This Magic Land On Make Believe
Is What I Seek And What i See
This Fairy tale lives inside of me...
It Not What I Whished its Not What I Dreamed
This Fairytale Will Continue As Long As I believe.
I really like how you made it positive, unlike a lot of others that use ES for their poems and writing. I really find it interesting though that in some places your grammar is... alternating between OK and Great. Altogether, its a good piece, it really reminded me of what my Mom said when my Dad arranged for their marriage vows to be redone. Keep writing, great things come not to those who wait, but those who keep working to become better. Now I nitpick.
Punctuation, In your words, such as Id, you forgot to put an apostrophe in between the letters. Also, try and variate your words a little more, add some spice. Finally, You have 2 small I's in the last four lines of the piece. Fix that, and your good, because your sitting on gold here.