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    dots Submission Name: The Notebook: Aquabluedots
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    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 79/97/96
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe Notebook: Aquabluedots
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    The sun glows against me
    It's reflection changes on my skin
    My deep blue hair cascades across the world
    When it rains my hair falls across the land
    Leaving strands everywhere

    Crabs and fish litter my doorstep
    Always coming, trying to get on
    They are my children
    The occupants of my womb

    Couples sit and stare at my beauty
    Sometimes diving into the tangle that is my hair
    Meeting each other and shedding their clothes
    Doing things that only I know

    Every month at midnight I cleanse my house
    Of all my children; time to get out
    Lending them to my neighbor
    Their footprints digging hills in his scalp
    Ouch

    As I grow and expand
    Contrast and contract
    My body fattens and thins
    Constantly changing it's shape and form

    My body is my kingdom
    And is yours to play in
    But remeber the ocean is not controlled by man or the earth
    But by it's emotions and fears, so stay alert




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