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Submission Name: The Notebook: Untitled dots

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Author:	BlueTorcher
Elite Ratio:	4.67 - 79/97/96
Words:	24

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	556
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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The Notebook: Untitled dots

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Knees against my chest
Legs buckled
Hand slapping the air
Eyes squeezed shut
Lungs contracting

Thanks for the laugh

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