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    dots Submission Name: Hera's Applesdots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 937
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       "the sentiment of being ready to act on life again but having some fear..."
    in her words, after she read this.

    made her cry.
    didn't mean to.

    shoosh now.


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    dotsHera's Applesdots
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    Day turns

    To an older woman, shy
    And buried in words, afraid of
    Certain physicality, assured

    There is time, so much time to
    Explore before this year
    Closes its eyes.


    Assume it's all a secret, a
    Golden apple, a persona behind
    A silken mind: frayed

    And bruised, a suspicious
    Blush, a hymen torn, untuned
    Yet wide asleepó

    Awaken, you.




    Submitted on 2009-02-17 12:02:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      
    your poems are invariably full of wonderful images and intriguing complexities that reflect the remarkable and beautiful stream of consciousness that you offer up to us on this site......and then there are pieces like this.


    i can see why this brought tears to her eyes....

    and i'm with Daniel on this.

    j
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      A thing for torn hymens? *Backs away slowly* ;) I would go along with 'delicate, drowsy softness' as a description of this one, though.

    I can certainly empathise with the crying; this is a beautiful description of something incredibly sad. I will confess that I don't quite understand the relevance of the Golden apple- I always thought it was associated with immortality, and of course Hercules' thievery.

    Wait, maybe that's it... some part of her spirit or essence (or something a lot more physical) has been stolen by someone else. That would fit in with my interpretation, anyway.

    I don't know if I can really suggest a whole heap here, your breaking up of conventional lines seems to be intentional and that's the only thing I can think of. As usual, a beautifully-written piece. And I love that final line :)
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by Civilian | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess i have a thing for torn hymens, I've read this 10-15 times and each time it affects me more with its delicate, drowsy softness so that I'm drawn further in.

    goodstuff,

    DB
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      a lucky gal... :)

    b
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by biska | [ Reply to This ]


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