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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 623



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    My heart is not some chocolate
    to be melted by the sun of your smile.

    Do not worry for me. I am a child no more.

    I have stopped dreaming in purple and orange
    a long while ago:
    sunset is over.
    You were right, the colors do clash.

    Dawn is near. I know, for the hour is dark.

    Do not worry. I've learnt that pearls should not be strewn before swine.
    I'll not cut my heart this time.

    This time
    my heart is safe in everlasting arms.

    Dawn is here.




    Submitted on 2009-02-17 14:53:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      there is something about this post that rings true to the words i read it a couple times to see if i got the same feeling from the first read
    its not like most of the broken love poems ive read it leaves the reader should i say feeling safe

    good write

    sandman
    | Posted on 2009-02-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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