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    dots Submission Name: Home is always with medots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHome is always with medots
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    You could be my downfall
    And I'll be your disaster
    I'll estrange you
    And you'll be my forever
    I'll tattoo you on my hand
    Rough and worn from touch
    I am maimed by your pain
    Because it got to be too much

    I can't focus, I can't scream
    I cant even dream. I'm waiting.
    Wailing. It all seemed so serene.

    Where am I gonna go from here?
    Where am I gonna go from here

    1,2,3,4 I'vebeen broken through the core
    shot right through me. You stuck a bullet in my chest.




    Submitted on 2009-02-17 16:22:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      home is where the heart
    is surgically altered to meet tomorrows
    that delicately pirouette
    like blind drunks through inane, potential sorrows

    that slight acid touch, the dance
    that coyly warms the flesh of chance
    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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