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An Important Part

Author: birdy5005
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A bad break-up that I struggle to put into words . . . .

An Important Part

I just can't seem to find it
It would help if I could somehow describe it

Who am I kidding?
You're not that much help
But, you see, I've lost a piece,
A very important part of myself

I can get over us and I can move on,
But I cannot forget that there is a piece gone

Submitted on 2009-02-17 23:38:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  and along the way you will find other pieces to replace the ones lost...

it kind of works that way....we become different parts...but the whole maintains somehow....learns and moves on.

| Posted on 2011-04-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  Much feeling and an aching heart is expressed here. Consider a break up or a failed love affair as a positive experience which we learn from. It will put it in a positive light rather than a negative light. It still hurts but that will help!

You have confidence and a writer's passion that will work well for you.
| Posted on 2009-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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