An Important Part

Author: birdy5005 Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 181 /137 /30 Words: 60

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An Important Part

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I just can't seem to find it It would help if I could somehow describe it Who am I kidding? You're not that much help But, you see, I've lost a piece, A very important part of myself I can get over us and I can move on, But I cannot forget that there is a piece gone

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and along the way you will find other pieces to replace the ones lost... it kind of works that way....we become different parts...but the whole maintains somehow....learns and moves on. jacob

| Posted on 2011-04-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

Much feeling and an aching heart is expressed here. Consider a break up or a failed love affair as a positive experience which we learn from. It will put it in a positive light rather than a negative light. It still hurts but that will help! You have confidence and a writer's passion that will work well for you.

| Posted on 2009-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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