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    dots Submission Name: To Raphaeldots
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    Author: realpoet
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    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
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       To those who would litteraly interpret my submission, DANCE WITH HIM , it may be of worth if you read this. I chose title since Raphael was the archangel who wrestled with Jacob and whose name means, "God heals."


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    I'm gonnah sinng myself a song
    though my lips will not move.
    I'll dance to the its tune though
    no shaking will be seen.
    Those drums will loudly beat
    but I'll be in no frenzied dance.
    I'll annoy those without joy or hope
    though they'll not see me
    shut up in my closet praying for them.

    No chicken dance will I perform
    without song of joy and tune of hope
    nor without frienzied drums abeating.
    Come see me perform
    in the streets of busied man
    when I nod my head in greeting,
    when shaking hand in friendship,
    when doing a kindly deed,
    I'm there adancing,singing,
    drumming and kicking up my heels
    in that unseen dance inside
    kicking my smile to the outside.

    Yes, I'm doing the chicken dance
    when I pick up my brother fallen
    into the ditch by the wayside.
    You can see my eyes adancing
    with twinkle of joy and hope
    no god has commanded me to do so,
    It is the foundation built
    when creator structured my home.

    Come see me perform
    ever so quietly by your side
    while within I dance
    a smile to the outside.
    Peace to you my brother ,
    I'll not blame you
    though litterally you do interpret
    in this dance I dance with Him .




    Submitted on 2009-02-18 05:15:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh wait no...I found something,

    Raphael was a renaissance painter but most importantly,also a teenage mutant hero turtle.

    Turtles are cool...

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      Erm...all I can really say is I agree with the previous comment.

    But express yourself as you see fit I guess.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      you know don't take this the wrong way but i think it's kind of silly to bicker in verse.

    not to say theirs anything wrong with the piece. i mean it's very good with certain qualities, i just don't think it comes across as intended. and i feel as though idk. statements on this site are best made in regular terms. just in concideration/respect for the site in general.

    but that's just my opinion and i am sure there are plenty who would disagree.
    | Posted on 2009-02-19 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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