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    dots Submission Name: Once Upon a Timedots
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    Author: col13x
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    Once Upon a Time


    I was able to see how everything connected
    I used to believe in the power of love
    I used to believe in something perfect

    Back then every facet of creation was respected

    I witnessed the flowing miracles of our being
    Solemn days set aside for our worship
    In celebrations of light, dance and music

    Once upon a time I new the living hearts of everyone was our alter
    And would you believe, impossible as it may seem
    Once upon a time; I even walked on water

    Those were the days
    In the centre of the world
    Those were the days before the age; of fear

    Those were the days when I lived in balance
    And those were the days we lived in reverence
    Yes those were the days when we were all human

    Those were the days before the age; of fear

    But now we are lost in our disconnection
    Thereís nothing left to remind us of our union
    These days I canít even think of heaven
    No; not without first thinking of the fear

    We have idolised ourselves in our adolescence
    And discovered every possible way to feed the fear
    But now I stand-alone in the architecture of my ruin
    My family divided, hated and derided, by the books of these beliefs

    These are the days of emptiness, this is the age; of fear
    Wasting away in desperateness, to live a life, when that life is already here
    These are the days of meaning-less,
    Yes; this is the age; of fear

    Yes I used to see the perfection
    I used to know the power of love
    I was able to feel our connection
    When natures calling lay open in my heart

    I bore witness to the flowing miracle of our conception
    Once upon a time I knew the loving hearts of everyone was our alter
    And would you believe, impossible as it may seem
    Once upon a time; I even walked on water

    But now I live in the age; of fear


















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