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    dots Submission Name: Love's Playwrightdots

    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 624
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       My Inspiration.
    is found anew.

    in the flow of two minds.
    meshing. oh so very well.

    To My Muse;
    Thank You.

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    dotsLove's Playwrightdots

    To say what is on my mind.
    Would be getting ahead of myself.

    But weíve already done that havenít we?

    We think weíve traveled two miles.
    When really Itís ten.

    Time and distance become soft.
    When Iím talking to you.

    What light through yonder message breaks.

    I await each dawn.

    For each one that passes, brings me closer to you.

    I can usually tell.
    What is in someoneís heart.
    And mind.

    But you are the bane of my power.

    Making you that much more.
    Mysterious to my mind.

    Youíve managed to captivate and capture me.
    Like the beast I am.

    I found myself in a primal state.
    Before you came around.

    But you educate me in the ways.
    That I once had forgotten.

    Let old acquaintance be forgot.
    And those who pain us.
    Alongside them.

    I stand here on the cusp of my manhood.
    Being a boy again.

    Back on the playground.
    with my first crush.

    I was lost at square one.
    Where another had abandoned me.

    But I saw you walk by.
    And now I realize how good it is to be back.

    I like being back to this Square.

    I was feeling quite cubed anyways.

    You once called me silly.
    And I realize.
    You make me that way.

    I havenít been here In a long time.

    So forgive my bluntness.
    But I must say.

    That I love what youíre doing.
    To me each and every time.
    You speak a single word.

    A word.
    A verse.

    Your Sentence.
    A sonnet.

    A Paragraph is a play.

    And I am surely immersed.
    In your lovely illusion.

    I hang on every thought.
    That you allow me to see.

    And crave more.

    I am the audience.
    In your loveís play.
    Be my Playwright?

    Submitted on 2009-02-19 03:58:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nice metaphor here...nice idea of how she is making the speaker feel like a young awkward boy again, who can't remember his lines...
    but the script is never perfect...and the ending is most important...

    if she accepts...there can be revision.
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was wow! =] I love it.
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by Nikki92 | [ Reply to This ]

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