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    dots Submission Name: Our Crumbled Futuredots
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    Author: FlickerofHope
    ASL Info:    17/Male/TN
    Elite Ratio:    6.93 - 86/80/31
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 96
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1208



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       This is another dark view I have of the future, one where our arrogance leads to our downfall and humanity is reduced to a shadow of its former glory.


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    dotsOur Crumbled Futuredots
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    The ground is full of holes
    The cracks we've all slipped into

    The masks that hide our faces
    Provide us with sweet ignorance

    Because the truth could hurt us
    We've wrapped ourselves in lies

    All our heros gave up on us
    So the villans begin to take hold

    We refused to listen to wisdom
    And misguided advice has deafened us

    We tore down out civilized government
    Which caused anarchy to dominate us

    Our children were beaten and abused
    So they turned on us with their hate

    Denied was our precious freedom
    And we all became mindless drones

    Silenced by our own foolish words
    Now we are muted by our stupidity

    When we think back to what we once were
    When we revisit that glorious place
    We begin to weep
    For we see how far we fell

    Because now that we've been humbled
    We realize our arrogance destroyed us
    But, alas, it is too late
    Forever we are now condemned to this

    Because arrogance, sweet friend
    Will cause us all to crumble




    Submitted on 2009-02-19 13:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I have to agree with the others. but i noticed that this is similar to the previous post. are you waiting for armagadon to happen or something. :)
    | Posted on 2009-04-14 00:00:00 | by DemonofHeaven | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, really good Nathan. Like Chan said, it was alot to grasp, and yet it seems easy because you could see that happening all too well. I like the way you structured it, Ive always had trouble with stanzas and whatnot, but you handled it like a pro. I like it, its pretty cool and the picture brought up by reading this is vivid.
    Well done!

    -Harriet

    (Chans a dork :P )
    | Posted on 2009-02-26 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a really deep poem. It makes a lot of points in short segments. But it is a lot to take in. not that i would change it, i like it the way it is, but i found my brain wandering as it struggled to realize every concept, one on top of another.

    Overall a good write

    - Harriet's Chan

    (Because i find that title uttetly hilarious, and all i've ever asked for all at the same time.)
    | Posted on 2009-02-25 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]



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