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    dots Submission Name: A tear for my frienddots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 759
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    Description:
       This poem is for Ramkishore prabhuraj.....
    A friend who I shall really miss...and a friend in-deed.

    Scenario: Well he left the company which we were working in and it was his last day. I thought he was a strong man and he is as he too cried that day venting out his emotions. All our team mates were around him outside the company.
    The thing was I never thought a heartless being like me could even cry let alone think of someone but yes unfortunately I did cry cause I seriously felt bad that he left.... But hey phone chat....bla bla many ways to communicate so ya i am glad he won't be that far from me....


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    dotsA tear for my frienddots
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    As one last day, he sought for a life,
    Desire to seek a dream, a new life…
    With bursts of emotions did he not see?
    A tear from every eye around him…


    I stood there with my heart filled in tears,
    A friend that I realized once he was gone,
    Life’s so cruel with emotions to feel,
    A tear in my eye to tell he was gone.

    I shook his hand, hugged him for one instant,
    I turned away and cried in disbelief.
    15 minutes of tears was all I could say,
    A friend who is now a heartbeat away….

    I shed my tears far away from him,
    To say was hard, to cry…harder
    Hope you know my friend of this emotion,
    Of mine that says “my friend” always…




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