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    dots Submission Name: The House of Memoriesdots
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    Author: XxXTwinkleXxX
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 1/2/3
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       This is a poem which was inspired by this picture I saw of a girl reaching towards what seemed like an abbandoned home. I have my specific ideas of what its about, but I'll leave you to interpret it however you want. Hope you like it!


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    dotsThe House of Memoriesdots
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    I reach for it
    though I know it isnt there.
    Because
    like a sparkle in a sea,
    the illusion in a trick,
    it threads a fine line
    between the truth and a lie;
    between memories and reality.

    Invisible to everyone but me.
    My eyes,
    the only ones blessed
    to lay upon it.
    And so I ask myself:
    is my life like this ghost?
    This ghost of a house;
    which,
    after it has fallen,
    crumbled into nothing,
    has forever been forgotten.
    Remember only by someone
    who, like me,
    has memories of something
    which will never truly die away.




    Submitted on 2009-02-19 21:14:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem. The choice of words was perfect and whimsical. It gives great visual effects while it also ties in with the metephors. Very good job!
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by Fal | [ Reply to This ]


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