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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 472
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 655
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       i wrote this but had a friend type it for me cuz im a slow typer with limited time...but he gives the computer razor burn...btw ill edit this later this is just a rough draft...

    ....edit finished.
    nothing different just fixed up a bit.
    the real background story is: i was "gangster" as a kid. half of this is something i wrote as a kid and the second half is something i added recently, in the end you could say its like a dedication to a girl i like.

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    Since the first day i met you i knew
    we would be together forever for eternity
    you were a dream in my eye - yeah baby its true
    every time i think of happiness, im thinking of you
    you are the greatest thing to me in my life you see
    cuz without you by my side i dont know where id be
    so im telling you again and again to let you know that im lovin you with all my heart and my soul
    from this day forward to the day that i die
    i wanna stay by your side till god moves us to the sky. Your my queen and i cherish every moment with you
    i wanna give you everything in life, yeah thats true
    you make me feel complete inside and in my mind
    god created you and sent you knowing youd be mine
    a perfect match made in heaven-you and me
    im gonna keep you at my side-as close as can be
    im gonna never let you go-hold you tight like a fist
    i know its not here yet but believe it exists
    theres a certain kind of happiness inside of my life
    and the day it comes through i could make you my wife. i just hope you accept and take me in as true
    all i can say is that i love you, i do, its true, i love you now nobodys perfect of course and we argue sometimes
    it only makes us stronger cuz im yours and your mine. we chill all day at your home i get your respect and trust but you know if fools trip im down to "bust"
    being me aint easy and you know how i am
    so let me take you to a special place
    take my hand lets travel to a sunset drift for days
    your the one thats down for me your the one that i crave.
    girl i keep thinking about the way you make me feel when im in your presence you give my body straight chills
    just knowing you want me by your side
    mellows my mind it gives me alot of pride
    girl i want you now and everyday
    so please sweet lady dont be afraid
    i got caught by your body personality too
    your hypnotized look- i had to persue
    your like a snowflake falling in a winter sky
    so tantilizing i cant deny
    ive always loved you from the very start
    theres nothing in this world thats gonna tear us apart cuz your my baby i hope you know its true
    every satisfying moment made me think of you
    and ill never forget what you mean to me coming straight from your man simply known as THieF

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      Hey I like this. I'll probably like it even more when you edit it and put it into its very own structure - but as far as the writing goes, it's very very sweet.
    I especially liked "until god puts us in the sky" (I think that's how it was worded). It had a certain touch of religion, that wasn't strong enough to really get under anyone's skin.

    And as far as your friend writing... I'm kind of proud of you. I can't bring myself to show my friends these things,never mind have them type it for me. (Mind you, I'm the fastest typer I know anyway :P). But I guess it shows a lot of character and personal strength that you do share stuff like this. That you have someone to trust.
    And that you mean all of your words.
    That's so great :)
    | Posted on 2009-03-02 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]

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