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    dots Submission Name: let you run freedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotslet you run freedots
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    im that girl that you cant see
    but somehow you still follow me
    i would fucking kill you
    but not before i rip your heart out
    while everything about you is mine
    there is nothing i doubt
    except your love
    your hate for me
    which does not make me bleed
    or want to leave
    only succeed
    and believe in me
    and what its like to be free
    im in love again
    and i wonder how this will end
    but for some reason you make me feel
    as if forevers really real
    and i want to know what youre thinking
    as you stare in my eyes without blinking
    and im sinking
    even deeper as youre winking
    at my heart
    please dont let me fall apart
    you lift me from this ground
    as i fall down
    you never turn around
    when i call you
    please be my dream come true
    im sure to you
    its nothing new
    you probably already knew
    what i wanted to do
    but now youre gone
    even though i cant say so long
    right now
    i dont know how
    and they tell me not to chase you
    as you run away from me
    let you run free
    and only hope one day
    youll come back to me
    last night i was so angry
    that you ditched me
    i understand your fear
    but please sit with me




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      Again the same anger, the same irrational line of words strung together. As I said in your other pome, I am glad you get this stuff out of you. But you want to know the very best way to achieve peace? Through Christ. I would love to help you just let me know

    your friend in christ
    Ben
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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