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    dots Submission Name: whoredots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    what the hell were you thinking
    i could kill you
    just as quickly as id die
    and i wonder why
    i didnt cry
    cuz im not in love with you
    cuz my worlds already too blue
    you obviously werent true
    and now theres nothing you could do
    to take it back
    i feel like io just got slapped
    what the hell
    i wouldnt do that
    could i get the same respect
    now i know youre just a whore
    what more could i expect

    Submitted on 2009-02-20 02:48:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the first comment sums it up however but if you trimmed it up a little and added some choice words im sure it would be alot more especially with a title like whore
    it is a strong word and needs grace and strength to discribe it

    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I know this piece is from some serious emotional experiance and for that I am truly sorry. However it is not poetry. I am sorry to be so blunt but that is the facts. HOWEVER, it is good you got that out of you here and did not do something crazy. Best of luck to you.

    your friend in christ
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]

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