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    dots Submission Name: fortold futuredots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsfortold futuredots
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    you cant see me even though im here in front of your face and im falling cuz of this disgrace and im not ready to lose this race especially not you but its true and i lose and its taking so long to get this clue but i cant get over you and it hurts cuz im dying so quickly and your leaving and im steadily believing that youll change and we could try to rearrange our fortold future but i get so unsure and i wonder if we could ever be pure and we could really endure each other long enough to not have to be so tough or rough around the edges and while im standing so close to these ledges youre just trimming the hedges around this garden of insanity though theres still not enough room to get through into your reality and i know its driving you crazy as i am and i refuse to be damned in this hate that surrounds me and i really think im ready to fly free and let you fall into me but right now i cant see




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