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Author: realpoet
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Humans,humans, oh so small
growing ever big and tall,
such wonder of all surrounds
awalking in the steps of hounds,

What mind there be of fashion?
what heart is there of passion
that formed you as eternal
in bones with covered dermal ?

Ah,what wretched strength of wrong
to think demise of truth so strong
that wilted Garden of Eden
when lie seemed greater greeting?

How staunch was thy cofession
in covered clothed agression ?
Could the Heavens reign supreme
or thy thoughts of better dream ?

What paradise can there be ?
What pro and con , look and see ?
What doctrine has better sound ?
Can not man see with God around ?

Through the ages come and gone
in all their shrouds of tinkling coins,
when revival sounds were heard
none denoted prophetic word.

Humans, humans , oh so small,
growing ever big and tall ,
such wonder of all surrounds
still walking in the steps of hounds.

Submitted on 2009-02-20 05:08:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wretched fossils polished white
in the strata of the night
whose fibrous being Blake had fed
like lineations left unread

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