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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 438
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Skeleton Key



    I found my hands were shaking
    When I discovered the thousand keys
    Running through an open landscape
    Surrounded by a thousand unopened doors

    I knew I had to find an answer
    To a question I couldn’t formulate or clue
    And all the doors they had a sign there
    Saying “ The Truth Lays Here Beyond ”

    But a thousand keys in my head were jangling
    To the locks of a thousand doors
    And I didn’t know which one of which
    Should I begin to try them all

    So I closed my eyes and danced my finger
    With the eeny meany miney mow
    Chose one door and just one key
    And let it lead me to a maybe of what maybe the key will be

    And to my surprise the lock turned and the portal swung ajar
    So I stepped across the threshold to the truth, which lay beyond
    Containing my anticipation of knowing the answer
    To a question I never could surmise

    But as the door swings closed behind me
    I couldn’t believe the sight my eyes could see
    A landscape of a thousand unopened doors surrounding me
    And the sound of a thousand jangling keys

    Seems I hadn’t learnt my lesson
    When I opened up the other one
    Should I try my luck one more time
    Pick a random door and randomise the key

    Now you would think I would have surrendered
    Thrown my hat and quietly walked away
    Shrugged the confounding off my shoulders
    And put it down to pointless futility

    Of finding one lock
    To fit a thousand keys

    Every door had a sign there
    Saying “ The Truth Lays Here Beyond ”

    I could have sat there and pondered the fortune
    Of discovering another hopeless mystery
    In a key full of landscapes
    Filled with the locked doors of my memory

    How much time had passed before the question came to me
    When I realised all I needed was just one single key
    To find the truth beyond the doors
    And the answer it was
    Me

    This is what you find
    When you begin to open
    This is what you find
    Behind the lock doors of your mind

    All the answers only have one
    Inescapable truth that you must find
    It really doesn’t matter
    How you couch the question

    The answer to the conundrum couldn’t be simpler
    It couldn’t be more true
    All the answers there are
    Are already inside of
    You













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    ||| Comments |||
      A very well written piece with a great message. The metre kinda gets muddled in the middle but you straighten it out in the end. Perhaps a little fine tuneing could straighten it up a little, but all in all it is a very good piece. I really enjoyed it.

    your friend in Christ
    Ben
    | Posted on 2009-02-21 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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