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    dots Submission Name: Echoesdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Every morning a man is seen to climb upon a hill

    His mission there to bare witness
    To the suns flooding as she rises
    Her painted fires airbrushed dawning through the skies
    He stands alone upon the grassy barrow
    Gathering every thought and fibre
    Every nuance of the unknown marrow
    His bodies longings for his lover

    The colours of the sunrise splash his passion
    Peaches suffuse azure washing blues
    When the dawning orb breaks its tethered anchor
    In her flaming pinks and fiery hues
    Lifting his spirit from the ground
    All his soul he has encompassed
    To an echoes welling plume of sound
    From his throat and from his heart felt
    And from a smile bathed in saddened tears
    It issues from his lips all his happiness and his pain
    He stands alone upon the hilltop
    Brought there by the echoes
    Which always sound the same
    With one lasting supplicant breath
    And calls out to forever
    Echoes every syllable of
    Her name

    Shouted out for a life he once new
    Called to a life he never lived
    Turned this echo to a sorrow
    By a curious cuckoos tourniquet of fate
    He turns to watch his shadow
    And carry on his day
    Descends again to the waiting meadow
    But in the niche of every hour
    And in the edge of all his smiles
    Lays a sadness to vague to remember
    Dormant in the corners of his eyes

    Yes the day is filled with loving
    In the patience of his hands
    And his heart is given over
    For living while he can
    But in the shadows of the evening
    The dusky moon upon the rise
    A distant voice is calling
    Sees the reflection of her eyes
    When his heart is turned to ponder a quietly burning flame
    Hearing how the echoes upon their returning
    Are whispering
    His name

    While the forgetful night is passing
    In reincarnates senses dreaming
    His breathing then beseeches
    The pillow of his prayers
    And as the day comes on a dusting
    Airbrushed dawn of coloured peaches
    Washes the flaming azure of her eyes
    All those words return upon their longing
    Baring witness to the dawning skies
    Brought there by the echoes
    Which always sound the same
    And written in his calling to the new sunrise
    Echoes there forever
    Every syllable of
    Her name

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