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    dots Submission Name: Walking Into Churchdots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.88 - 183/171/118
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 138
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    Description:
       Dedicated to anyone stuck in a religion, cult, or religious sect that you really do not want to be in.

    This is satire because I view it asa wry, sarcastic piece with some truth in it.This is written in anticipation of a church gathering I am being forced to attend tonight. I have nothing against God at all: I'm merely being forced to take part in a religious Catholic ceremony I don't want to take part in, and this little jolly gathering is in preperation for it.
    Oh, to turn eighteen.


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    dotsWalking Into Churchdots
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    Oh, hell, I want to let it go.
    Oh, hell, I hope the priest is a no-show.
    Oh, hell, get me out of this,
    I want to go home.

    Clad in mostly black because it's all I own
    Eyes darkened by kohl, skin pale to the bone
    Silver chain and spikes hanging around my neck
    Demon eyes flashing because I feel like a speck

    God, am I glad that I have allies beside me
    Because my thoughts are being tangled inside me
    The church director's eyes say: "Heathen, how I despise thee!"
    Shit, I think that they're going to exorcise me

    Now all the parents are looking at me like I'm a satanist
    You see, it's days like these that make me want to be an atheist
    I start to play with my chains just to avert my eyes
    I feel like dropping the act and screaming out all of their lies

    You see, I TOLD them that this would end badly
    And I can't justify the way everyone is looking at me
    You say I am what I am to antagonize
    But I tell you that you're the ones in a disguise

    Wonder what they'd say about "the gays"
    If I told them of the ten million ways
    That I disagreed with their philosophy
    Look, I have gay friends: you can't blame me

    Now everyone's looking at me like I'm a satanist
    You see, it's days like these that make me wanna be an atheist
    I start to play with my hair just to avert my eyes
    I feel like dropping the act and screaming out all of their lies

    God, I want to let it go.
    God, I hope the priest is a no-show.
    God, get me out of this,
    I want to go home.




    Submitted on 2009-02-20 21:53:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I liked it a lot and can relate closely. The flow was amazing, water in my mind. I especially like how you made it out to be that you're doing nothing wrong, but they dislike you anyway.
    Fantastic write.
    Keep up the great work and I'll keep reading.

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2009-02-26 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Whats so funny then?

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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