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Time Gone Gone Gone

Author: Jazzy
ASL Info:    20/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90 /221 /227
Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Time Gone Gone Gone

I'm stuck with dial-up in this high speed world,
Seems just how my life is. Race by, race by
Like a turtle in quicksand with a broken leg.
I may not move as quickly as they do, but
Heck, I know when to stop and think. I know
How to stop and drink in the sweet frangrance
Of succulent roses, bathing ing in milky sunlight.
They have to go, go, go right on past, without
Even catching a glimpse. What is it that they need
To save time for so badly?

Submitted on 2009-02-20 23:09:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this does have elements of good poetry. i feel that for being 14 you wrote a very good poem with this one. that is all.

| Posted on 2009-02-21 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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