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    dots Submission Name: One-Sided Lovedots
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    Author: lordfawnachawn
    Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 0/2/3
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Does this count as angst? If so, I'm sorry. I just wrote this from personal experience...


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    dotsOne-Sided Lovedots
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    We all know
    what it’s like when
    you’re only a shadow
    to the one
    you love.
    But what if it was
    the other way
    around?

    What about when the one
    you like is the one
    that loves you?
    What about
    when they’re
    the invisible one?

    It’s scary. That’s
    for sure, with them
    following you,
    giving everything and
    asking for nothing
    but your
    company.
    Your love.

    But you
    have no love
    to give them, so
    what happens?
    What happens when
    you’re being smothered in
    one-sided
    love?

    Don’t wish it
    on any enemies,
    don’t wish the mild
    like, pain, guilt,
    the absolute hell
    that it puts you through.
    But if it’s bad
    for you, what
    about them?

    What about the one
    who is invisible,
    the one who
    you can’t notice
    even if you try.
    What happens to
    the one who
    loves you?

    They can’t help
    it. It’s not their fault
    that you’re so damn
    lovable. What should
    you be feeling?

    You hate
    yourself, for putting
    them through this
    hellfire. But you’re
    flattered. Who
    wouldn’t? And
    then you hate
    yourself even more,
    for even thinking about
    being happy when
    that poor soul
    is miserable,
    heartsick, all
    because you can’t
    bring yourself to love.

    Love sucks. That’s
    the bitter truth.
    If you’re able to
    walk the thin
    line between true
    love and obsession,
    watch out. It only
    takes a tiny push
    to send you falling
    forever to the
    depressing chasm
    that is
    one-sided
    love.




    Submitted on 2009-02-21 00:21:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh and I love that your concious about not sounding angsty,you have no idea how much that will set you apart from others.

    | Posted on 2009-02-21 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I wouldnt say angst,because although it might be about personal experience its not just a me me me statement like all the other self-obsessed emotional "poets" you get up here.

    Its not great,but I think the fact you attempted to contribute a bit of thought to a common problem is admirable.

    I think maybe you should have classified it as random thoughts more so than poetry.

    But yeah no one likes a lap dog,tis very true.

    People are more likely to feel passionate about the un-obtainable,go out with anyone for six months and you get used to having them around,but its doesnt have the thrill of the chase.

    You can get a big ego from that.

    Anyhow good luck

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-02-21 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


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