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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Bluedots

    Author: Luvmiannie
    ASL Info:    30 something
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 20/7/14
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMr. Bluedots

    I fell in love with a guy
    and his name is Mr. Blue
    he tied my hands behind my back
    and knew exactly what to do

    Oooh yeah they call him Mr. Blue
    Papa dog and daddy cool
    but all I know is that
    that boy done walked
    a hole inside these shoes

    Yeah I fell in love with a guy
    and he aint got no alibi
    cops came knocking at my door
    wanting to know where I was hiding him

    I want to lie for my guy
    he holds the key to my
    drop my panties to my ankles
    make me sing a lullaby

    I told the cops that my guy
    he left about a half past 8
    I put his breakfast on the table
    and tried to make him run late

    I fell in love with a lie
    that fell in love with me
    I never met a man that had
    so much grace between his knees

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      This is a very interesting poem... and I must say I like it! Good job!
    | Posted on 2009-02-22 00:00:00 | by whiteangel | [ Reply to This ]

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