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    dots Submission Name: of sadness in icedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    30/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 188/293/258
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 156
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsof sadness in icedots
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    i speak light into coolness of romance
    & another falling leaf,
    of sadness in ice
    & its counting of the numbers
    beyond my heart's recognition...
    a little smaller than this
    & the moon is pouring
    again.

    yet,
    the hazards
    of the wayward body persist
    & i am unusual
    amongst bright flowers.
    i celebrate the stubble
    scattered across
    a plow torn field,
    the music
    of knowing that you're all alone.

    the vines confound me
    as they make their way
    through my moods
    as heavy
    as the morning
    & as thick
    as the parts of you
    that turn to broken doves
    when i touch them
    to my lips.

    the sea seems further
    away than she should be
    &, still, i feel her
    whispering past a century's
    last pines,
    lost amongst the needles
    beneath their bark.
    i tongue at oxygen
    to get a better sense
    of her waves.
    i feel the space
    between us
    turn to rust.

    may our bodies
    remember nothing
    when we're gone.





    Submitted on 2009-02-21 01:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      beautifulf poem, hypnotizing and well spaced, great write, I like the way you move the imagery
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]


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