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    dots Submission Name: Moon Rocksdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 639



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       I'm every woman, it's all in me, anything you want done baby I do naturally.



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    dotsMoon Rocksdots
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    Expression of Fear

    goes on to stutter and attempt to tell a story

    the characters are familiar
    warm skin
    soft lips
    hair
    and arms

    he laughs
    as I pass him
    he is sitting
    in a chair

    he is posing for a picture
    statue, unmoving
    cement, when I fell I scraped my knee and cried
    marble, symmetry

    his face is interchangeable with the wind
    and the sky
    and the mirror image of his body
    lives in space

    and underneath
    the spaces in between






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      What's this one about? Infact, what's everything you've written lately about?
    | Posted on 2009-03-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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