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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       two poems, kinda connected seeing as it was one 24 hour period, yeah?

    yesterday, went to great barrier island and back for a wedding: 3 hour/90km cat(amaran)-ferry ride each way, 4-5 hour ceremony, swimming in rapid bay before getting back on said ferry, then up till 3 a.m. or later checking out local bands and whatnot with friends and acquaintances on k'rd.

    busy day.
    i'm still knackered.


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    'the essence of coffee, 6 p.m. sunday'


    there's
    an experiment to be found
    in all of this, here, awake
    yet eternally sleepy and fused
    to this bed which speaks of a father
    i saw and hugged and told i
    didn't connect with when i was barely
    thirteen, just getting into the vibrancy
    of teenage depression and the accompanying
    pull of heartbeats found only in poetry
    and the smell of pregnant summer and
    foetal-cramped wind pushed over
    the hairs of my fingers travelling through
    the pages of a book i carried with me
    just yesterday, spray-paint waves lurching
    my stomach and telling me it's only half a
    journey, that i should swim in the kina-infested
    bay out here in the hauraki's
    crystal glare.

    shoosh.



    'crush'


    you
    deny what is
    apparent, eyes closed
    to a saltier connection
    i've only found in the interlude
    between concertos mirrored back to me
    in the way flesh tumbles past at 3 a.m., entirely unsure
    where the rest of the night will take them, believing
    there is only one chance to give, receive, transform
    and crush under mutable shadows heaving
    with the expectations of
    a twenty-something
    year old out
    drowning
    in this
    city.




    Submitted on 2009-02-22 07:06:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Off the criticism topic, big timeeeeee, but is it important?í

    Iíll comment on this one because my brother and sister in law were married on Hamilton Island, sooooo romantic!!!!! Airlie Beach, and the great barrier reef, I mean fVck talk about beautiful!!! That they are.
    At that time after the wedding we took this beautiful sail on this beautiful yacht that sailed the Sydney to Hobart many years ago, anyway, in my adulation of the whole beautiful experience (I had just got home from Europe) I called my love on the cell phone and put the cell phone to the bow of the yacht to hear the beauty of the occasion, he actually hung up on me (it was a good time his time) (what a prick!!!)(I would guess in jealousy for that most amazing moment I so desperately wanted to share) I married that son of a [censored] two years latter (despite that moment that should have said fvch you if you canít share this gracefully... Iím such a fool)... He killed me. The upside is that the actual moment saw my father teach my daughter how to swim... latter we all snorkelled the reef together (though she was so scared of the fish that were as big as she was at the time and she made like a koala on my back but tht was ok). I went wind surfing, which was magic. My brother and his wife have gone through a million storms since then but they are great sailors and get through it all. From her mother ODing to the check out, too you name it really

    From that time to this, my best moment was pulling up the scallop dredge sizing the scallops and pulling out the oysters with my father and cousin and daughter and then husband, throwing back all that was under size, putting a knife though the oysters and eating them on the boat as they should be near anchorage off the coast on the south island... With precise bites because you know they are still alive, so if you canít chew down hard over the mass donít bother sort of thing.

    OMG how crass LOL all true but still blah...

    Being knackered, god how much more of a kiwi expression could you take? If you guys can live on fish and birds you will rule the world one day, do you know that? But you would never want to rule the world, we know that.. Not that it matters... If you donít survive down there no one will.


    Um yeah, sorrry, I just cant seem to get all light hearted for some stupid reason.
    | Posted on 2009-03-05 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      ...sometimes being knackered is the best way to be....
    beats boring or downright dead. Cheers, have a good one at the bands... hopefully some inspiring stuff there to write about.
    | Posted on 2009-02-22 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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