A single slither of light
Slices through the jet black darkness.
Centre stage:
A solitary red rose stands in the glaring spotlight
Tears silently trickle down her full velvet petals
Drip-dropping onto the cold stone floor.
A primal scream erupts from her opening mouth
And as her deafening cry reaches its blood-curdling climax
Her whole body shatters into a thousand pieces of coloured glass.
I love this, the imagery is so vivid and the emotion in it so raw. I like the direction as well "centre stage" it disrupts the reading of the poem and makes the reader take a step back and really think about what they are being shown. The message is really sad, like the persona's emotions have consumed them and detroyed them. I thought the visual images were really good, I can still see the rose in my head as I'm typing :D
This sounds like the author feels pain from being alone and forgotten.
The rose seems so beautiful filled with suffering and hurt.
Writen in such a well thought out poetic form.
I hope these disadvantages don't cost too much.
Or these out looks taken too far.
Submission Name: Rose
