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    dots Submission Name: When I flydots

    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhen I flydots

    When I fly, I would not be like Icarus
    I will not strive for the heavens, nor trust
    On the weak wings that my heart created
    My feeble limbs in mid air shall remain,
    For if a sudden fall comes along my way,
    The drop will not be too great or unkind.

    Eighty-seven eye lashes wavered in somber sleeps
    Inside your head, you counted sheep, while from
    Afar I admire every blemish drawn on your face,
    Like a brush I paint and trace each crease, and
    With this I soar higher toward the sunís fire

    No longer counting down the days your love
    Will cease but rather naming the times I caught
    The sunís rays and let my wings ablaze, knowing
    Our heartsí fate is this, burning our wings side by side,
    Each moment birthing our phoenix that nurtures
    And matures from the ashes of our ardor.

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      How can you say you don't strive for the heavens, when the ecstatic euphoria of your oblivion nurtures just such a home. Heaven need not be a place for only God, and surely he meant for us to aspire to such heights. Sheer horse feathers, right.

    | Posted on 2013-05-21 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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