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    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    Listening to the beatles before dawn breaks keeping my mind sane
    He says he loves the way we kiss. He says he loves how I look asleep.
    I want to crack open his skull and memorize every thought that processes
    inside.
    Do you love me? He always asks. He never forgets to ask.

    My mind is melting somewhere inside, somewhere inside it still is.
    Come find it. I cannot find it, where my mind go? Underneath all the
    Pointless college lectures I took. Crammed with no breathing space.
    If you blow away the dust, maybe it still works. Donít let it die beneath
    This retardation you call education. I donít need a degree to prove to you I have brains.
    Iím losing my mind. My mind is dirty. Keep blowing away the dust like
    It was a Nintendo game.

    Love me? I am losing myself, under cans of beers and lame parties.
    Every weekend is the same down here. Iím seeking social interaction
    Not vomit stained tiled floors and dizzy toilet swirls. I am seeking you,
    Someone like you, nothing like you. Where are you? Every day is the same.
    Step back, you say, no is not.




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