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    dots Submission Name: Wait On Something To Die Fordots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 673
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    Bytes: 1421



    Description:
       heaven + hell = mind


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    dotsWait On Something To Die Fordots
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    I'll wait until i find the remedy,
    The truth shouldn't last eternity,
    Rationality isn't hidden in the sky
    In your mind, perceive what's on the other side-
    Waiting for you,
    Shut your eyes,
    I know it's not what you had in mind

    If i live to die and you die to live
    We still have no choice in hell or heaven
    but we actually had freedoms on earth,
    If i live to die and you die to live
    Just know it's so irrelevant to wait-
    On something that you have to die for,

    You'll wait until you find eternity,
    But your fate relies on insecurity,
    and you pray, asking God for everything,
    Security and comfort in another day
    Waiting for you,
    Hopefully?
    I hope it's not what you had in mind

    If i live to die and you die to live
    We still have no choice in hell or heaven
    but we actually had freedoms on earth,
    If i live to die and you die to live
    Just know it's so irrelevant to wait-
    On something that you have to die for,

    Patience, for the light will burn your eyes
    When you find out you memorized the lies
    You lived by them, you ate them up
    Look down, before your head gets stuck (in the clouds)...

    Then you'll be the one who looks crazy.




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