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    dots Submission Name: Tale of K'i-lindots
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    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 596
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1212



    Description:
       A tale of the first apperance of the mythical unicorn.


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    dotsTale of K'i-lindots
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    In China the Unicorn appeared, in twenty six BC,
    K'i-lin he was named, and had risen from the sea.
    Being one true vision, yet of not one correct version,
    Exquisite in rainbow colours, this his first excursion.

    Resembling a dragon, with fish like scales,
    Swam with elegance, beside the grace of whales.
    A voice which matched the tinkling of bells,
    Living a thousand years, finally, his life expels.

    Honoured, as the King of animals on land,
    His head held a mane, cloven hooves, to stand.
    He held important messages, for the human race,
    Which the Emperor Huang-ti, did wholly embrace.

    K'i-lin wandered through the great palace, so free,
    Soon came the lucky years, the Emperor made his plea.
    Inventing musical instruments, building homes from brick,
    He united the tribes, as the great Unicorn did predict.

    Many years of happiness, reigned over the land,
    Emperor Huang-ti, did rule by fair of hand.
    The Unicorn next appeared, at the death of Huang-ti,
    Taking him to the land of the dead, eternally to lie.





    Submitted on 2009-02-24 18:22:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This tale is real coool. I like the story and the way you wrote it.


    | Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Asian mythology is quite interesting. I would like to see more of this from you.

    Ja ne! ^_^
    | Posted on 2009-02-26 00:00:00 | by Jelly | [ Reply to This ]


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